His sentence:
But others are of an infiltering spidery type that creep and burrow along the minute crevasses of the brain, slowly but inevitably destroying function, and almost impossible to remove.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Gunther uses commas and a fan boy to describe what is going on.
My sentence:
But students are of the disrespectful type that talk in the middle of a lesson, softly but destroying trains of thought for others, and in the rudest way possible.
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Sunday, October 11, 2009
Sentence 11
His sentence:
In blunt fact the operation itself, though prolonged, may not be violently dangerous, and though the technical preparation may be difficult, the actual surgery is of the most primitive type--simple extrication of an alien mass.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Gunther uses commas and a dash to carry out the sentence and explain what it is talking about.
My sentence:
In the winter itself, though prolonged, may be cold, and though the money on heating will go up, the scenery is of the most beautiful ever--blankets of snow all the time.
In blunt fact the operation itself, though prolonged, may not be violently dangerous, and though the technical preparation may be difficult, the actual surgery is of the most primitive type--simple extrication of an alien mass.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Gunther uses commas and a dash to carry out the sentence and explain what it is talking about.
My sentence:
In the winter itself, though prolonged, may be cold, and though the money on heating will go up, the scenery is of the most beautiful ever--blankets of snow all the time.
Sentence 10
His sentence:
Almost all the great contemporary neurosurgeons--like Putnam himself and Wilder Penfield--are Cushing men, Cushing trained.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Gunther uses dashes to compare what has been said and what is being said.
My sentence:
Almost all the great athletes--like Shaq himself and Micheal Jordan--are fighting men, fighting trained.
Almost all the great contemporary neurosurgeons--like Putnam himself and Wilder Penfield--are Cushing men, Cushing trained.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Gunther uses dashes to compare what has been said and what is being said.
My sentence:
Almost all the great athletes--like Shaq himself and Micheal Jordan--are fighting men, fighting trained.
Sentence 9
His sentence:
The brain controls pain in other parts of the body, but there are no sensory nerves in brain tissue itself; you could cut a person's brain apart bit by bit, and there would be no pain.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
This compound-complex sentence uses semi-colons and fan boys that help explain how part of the brain works and/or some of what the brain does.
My sentence:
The mom controls fights in the family, but there is no dad to help with the situations; she could snap her fingers once, and the children would settle down.
The brain controls pain in other parts of the body, but there are no sensory nerves in brain tissue itself; you could cut a person's brain apart bit by bit, and there would be no pain.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
This compound-complex sentence uses semi-colons and fan boys that help explain how part of the brain works and/or some of what the brain does.
My sentence:
The mom controls fights in the family, but there is no dad to help with the situations; she could snap her fingers once, and the children would settle down.
Sentence 8
His sentence:
It was a long ride in the cold, sullen, slippery rain.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Even though this sentence is very simple, it is very descriptive and somewhat deep in its listing of what the rain was like. It sets the mood.
My sentence:
It was a scary thought in a dark, cold, eerie room.
It was a long ride in the cold, sullen, slippery rain.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Even though this sentence is very simple, it is very descriptive and somewhat deep in its listing of what the rain was like. It sets the mood.
My sentence:
It was a scary thought in a dark, cold, eerie room.
Sentence 7
His sentence:
Dr. Johnson, suspecting nothing so grave as this, had sent Johnny into Greenfield that morning--luckily with a nurse--for his metabloism test.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
This sentence uses two appositive phrases. One set apart by commas and the other set apart by dashes.
My sentence:
The mother, hoping that everything was alright, had rushed to the hospital that evening--luckily wtih a friend--for her son.
Dr. Johnson, suspecting nothing so grave as this, had sent Johnny into Greenfield that morning--luckily with a nurse--for his metabloism test.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
This sentence uses two appositive phrases. One set apart by commas and the other set apart by dashes.
My sentence:
The mother, hoping that everything was alright, had rushed to the hospital that evening--luckily wtih a friend--for her son.
Sentence 6
His sentence:
I talked to Traeger, I called Deerfield back, I got in touch with Frances who was out in Madison, I reached Putnam, I consulted Traeger once more, and by half-past four I was at 168th Street, waiting in Putnam's office.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
In this sentence, Gunther uses a series of parallel phrases telling what all he did--leading up to where he was.
My sentence:
I went to work, I got food, I got to the school, I organized everything I needed, I talked with my friends, and by twelve o'clock I was ready for the band competition, waiting in the band room.
I talked to Traeger, I called Deerfield back, I got in touch with Frances who was out in Madison, I reached Putnam, I consulted Traeger once more, and by half-past four I was at 168th Street, waiting in Putnam's office.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
In this sentence, Gunther uses a series of parallel phrases telling what all he did--leading up to where he was.
My sentence:
I went to work, I got food, I got to the school, I organized everything I needed, I talked with my friends, and by twelve o'clock I was ready for the band competition, waiting in the band room.
Sentence 5
His sentence:
He was always obedient--if only because he wanted so desperately to get well.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
The sentence is set apart by a dash--describing why he was obedient.
My sentence:
Bob was always sweet--if only because he wished so badly to have a girlfriend.
He was always obedient--if only because he wanted so desperately to get well.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
The sentence is set apart by a dash--describing why he was obedient.
My sentence:
Bob was always sweet--if only because he wished so badly to have a girlfriend.
Sentence 4
His sentence:
Johnny's generosity--he would give anything away--his affectionateness and amiability, concealed a considerable sturdiness of character.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Gunther uses an appositive phrase set apart by dashes, giving more incite about Johnny and his character. Then, the sentence continues on describing more about him by listing--showing more of what his character was like.
My sentence:
Karen's love--she would care for anybody--her affection and grace, held a sturdiness of character.
Johnny's generosity--he would give anything away--his affectionateness and amiability, concealed a considerable sturdiness of character.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Gunther uses an appositive phrase set apart by dashes, giving more incite about Johnny and his character. Then, the sentence continues on describing more about him by listing--showing more of what his character was like.
My sentence:
Karen's love--she would care for anybody--her affection and grace, held a sturdiness of character.
Sentence 3
His sentence:
His intelligence was, above all, detached and reasonable--and what is a mind for, except to reason with?
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
He describes "his intelligence" by using an appositive and descriptive words. Then, he uses a dash to, once again, go into deeper thought, leaving the sentence as a rhetorical question.
My sentence:
Her clothes were, above all, cute and fashionable--and what are clothes for, except to characterize with?
His intelligence was, above all, detached and reasonable--and what is a mind for, except to reason with?
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
He describes "his intelligence" by using an appositive and descriptive words. Then, he uses a dash to, once again, go into deeper thought, leaving the sentence as a rhetorical question.
My sentence:
Her clothes were, above all, cute and fashionable--and what are clothes for, except to characterize with?
Wednesday, October 7, 2009
Sentence 2
His sentence:
From Frances he got a tremendous lot--his gift for fantasy, the realism and long view of his intelligence, his delicacy of perception, his creative curiosity.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Using a prepostional phrase, Gunther explains the main topic of his sentence. Then, he goes into deeper thought telling why it was a tremendous lot by using a dash that follows parallel phrases.
My sentence:
From restrauants he got amazing service--his food for taste, the greatness and politeness of his waitress, his moment of relaxing, his satisfied body.
From Frances he got a tremendous lot--his gift for fantasy, the realism and long view of his intelligence, his delicacy of perception, his creative curiosity.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Using a prepostional phrase, Gunther explains the main topic of his sentence. Then, he goes into deeper thought telling why it was a tremendous lot by using a dash that follows parallel phrases.
My sentence:
From restrauants he got amazing service--his food for taste, the greatness and politeness of his waitress, his moment of relaxing, his satisfied body.
Sentence 1
His sentence:
As the prize in one of the quizzes he won, he chose an advanced college text on the atom--something far beyond his powers at the time.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Gunther is using continual prepositional phrases leading up to the main point he is trying to make. Then, he uses a dash to go into deeper meaning and thought about the subject.
My sentence:
As the group of students in one of the classes had done, they chose a challenging topic of history--something more advanced than their brains could understand at that age.
As the prize in one of the quizzes he won, he chose an advanced college text on the atom--something far beyond his powers at the time.
from Death Be Not Proud by John Gunther
Gunther is using continual prepositional phrases leading up to the main point he is trying to make. Then, he uses a dash to go into deeper meaning and thought about the subject.
My sentence:
As the group of students in one of the classes had done, they chose a challenging topic of history--something more advanced than their brains could understand at that age.
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